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Inside of us is a melody,
it's inside the hearts of you and me.
Although sometimes it's quiet and tender,
our melody is a soft, friendly reminder.
The sound inside of everyone,
will be a bind that can't be undone.
It's a note that connects with each other,
its a mark of acceptance towards one another.
We will all be heard eventually,
sometimes it's you, and sometimes it's me.
The melody inside of our body, our hearts,
is what keeps us from staying apart.
It is the sound of our sadness and fear,
but it's also the sound of the smiles you smile here.
It is the words that stay unspoken,
it is the reason some hearts are broken.
But if you listen, just listen closely,
I'm sure you can hear your melody.
Hear the thoughts that you think inside,
hear the feelings that you want to hide.
Understand yourself just a little be more,
open up that heavy closed door.
Our melody plays steady and neat,
it's a beauty that no one can beat.
Our melody is a song for ourselves,
it reminds us of our good health.
Somtimes our melodies grow a little bit louder,
that is your feelings growing stronger and stronger.
Then when it reaches the danger zone,
that is when you know you've already grown.
Your melody is now a comeplete song,
that will keep playing long and strong.
This song can be heard by your closest friends,
and when you hear theirs, thats when it ends.
The secrets and feelings you feel inside,
will no longer have to hide.
You have found your inner voice,
and beacuse of that, you can rejoice.
Do not hide your beatiful sound,
for if you lock it up, it cannot be found.
And here I wait to hear your song,
I have a feeling that I won't have to wait long.
The voices inside that speak in notes.
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sentunderscore Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great poem!
I'm usually not a big fan of editing poems after they come out, but maybe this one could use it a little bit since it was free verse?

Either way,
I love the point you make.
It's one I don't think a lot a people think about.
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XanthiaB Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the rhyme scheme. Some free verse poems don't have it, and sometimes it's not effective, but here it's used in the best way possible.

One thing I would suggest improving is breaking up the poem into stanzas, but of course, the block-body form might be entirely intentional.

The best part of the poem must have been the beginning. An beautiful concept, conveyed in the simplest words imaginable. Wonderfully well-written.
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ThePenVsTheSword Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Student Writer
This was very good! I like the concept of it the most!
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